Argumentative Essay About Studying Overseas

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Students from developing countries where education systems are not that advanced, prefer to go abroad for progressive studies. However as a coin has two sides this situation brings both benefits and drawbacks.

The advantages of getting a professional or research degree abroad are very vast. Firstly, when students from under developed countries, where schools are deprived of experienced teachers and advanced teaching equipment, go abroad for studies get an oppurtunity to study in an educational system which is more modern as compared to the education system in their country.

Secondly, students with a foreign degree get a very well paid job as foreign education is mostly referred to as modern education. Furthermore, in some cases a student who goes to a country with an entirely different culture and lives there independently develops a sense of maturity and confidence as he tries to settle in the unusual environment.

Another benefit of studying abroad is that students learn a foreign language and master it as oral practice of the language is my more efficient than learning it in class.

Along with the advantages there are also many disadvantages of studying abroad. Foreign education being more advanced than the education in developing countries is very expensive and thus a financial burden is imposed on the families of students studying abroad and the families often take loans to pay the tuition fee. Also students have to find accommodation to live in and will have to pay for it while they are studying.

The most important disadvantage of studying abroad is that many high potential and talented students go to study abroad as they are offered free education and after completing their education they find a well paid job in that country and thus settle there. Due to this many countries lose individuals with technical skills and knowledge to the developed countries.

Another disadvantage is that students have to stay away from their families while studying and thus feel lonely or home sick sometimes.
Although studying abroad can be very beneficial in improving the standard of living but still has many disadvantages that prevent the students from receiving foreign education.

However, as a coin has two sides,studying abroad brings both benefits and drawbacks.
The advantages of getting a professional or research degree abroad are vast.
Firstly, when students from under developed countries, where schools are deprived of experienced teachers and advanced teaching equipment, go abroad for studies, they get an oppurtunity to study in an educational system more modern thanthat in their country.

Secondly, students with a foreign degree get a very well-paying jobs as foreign education is mostly referred to as modern education.
Furthermore, in some cases a student who goes to a country with an entirely different culture and lives there independently develops independence and confidence as he tries to settle in the unfamiliar environment.

Another benefit of studying abroad is that students can learn and master a foreign languageas they inevitably use it every day



--> Expensive education and housing in developed countries often force the students' families to get a tremendous loan.
The most serious problem of studying abroad is that many talented students do not return home even after completing their education, but settle their new home with good jobs.

As a result, many developing countries have lost many individuals who were to bring technical skills and knowledge there .

Another disadvantage is that students have to stay away from their families while studying, and thus, sometimes feel lonely or home sick .

It is so wordy. Perhaps you should rewrite the whole essay.


  1. #114-Sep-2008, 15:06

    The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

    Dear All,

    I am new member on this forum.I think this is a good forum to help each other improving our language.This is my essay about the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.Could you guy can give me some advice on my essay?Thank in advance for your kindness.and this is my essay below:


    When people's standard of living increase,they often think about improving their knowledge for a better life.To do that,they choose to study in developed contries where they can get progressive education.However,everything has its advantages and disadvantages,so studying abroad is not an exeptation.

    In my opinion, I think studying abroad is the beat way to improve ourselve.As you know, there are obvious advantages to study abroad.

    Fristly, We have chance to improve our language. I think nothing is better than to learn language with the native speakers.Because we can practise with the local people what we study at school, so it is very useful to improve our listening and speaking skills.It also offer chances to discover the new cultures,way of thinking,history,customs and lifestyles.

    Futhermore, we have opportunities to study the new technologies and most recent science achivements.In addition, we are equipped with the valuaable and updated knowledge which may help us find jobs easily after graduating.

    However, studying abroad is often expensive.We have to pay not only for our school fees but also for our living cost.Therefore, finance may become the biggest problem. Consequently, it distracts our mind from studying to earning money.

    Last but not least,adapting to a new environment is e real challenge for every foreign student.While changing the weather can affect our health,different cultures and customs may influence our mind and make us become less confident or even a victim of discrimination.Everyday may turn into a struggle for survival in a strange coutry.If we dont have enough physical and mental strength,we will fail to adjust ourselve in the new environment.As a result, we could neither study or gain beautiful experiences as we have expected.

    In conclustion, while studying abraod offers great opportunities for a better future,it also has challenges that we must try our best to overcome what happened to make our dream come true.Therefore,If you have a chance i think you should take that chance to study abroad.
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  2. #214-Sep-2008, 17:02

    Re: The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

    Try:
    When people's standard of living improves, they often think about increasing their knowledge so they can have a better life. To do that, they choose to study in developed contries where they can get a progressive education. However, everything has its advantages and disadvantages, and studying abroad is no exception.
    There are punctuation problems.

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    When people's standard of living increase,they often think about improving their knowledge for a better life.To do that,they choose to study in developed contries where they can get progressive education.However,everything has its advantages and disadvantages,so studying abroad is not an exeptation.
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    Re: The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

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  4. #414-Sep-2008, 17:59

    Re: The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad.

    Studying abroad gives us a better chance to improve our language skills.

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